أول تجربة لي لكتابة قصه باللغه الإنجليزية " The mysterious house

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I've finished these lines only

He was wondering, what was behind this old door ?
Everyday the same question was questioned but there was no response.
After a long time, he found a clue which made the mysterious door possible to be solved.

Any way , this man had to find a partner to assist him to reveal the secret of the ugly house.
Although this person was having an evidence but the house was not safe to enter it without weapons.

First of all, let me give this story a very good mark

For its simple language that itten in

So that, no complex sentences , no complex words
and very simple Idea ,too.
Some thing I wished here

I hoped you made an enough description for any thing around
as an introduction for the story, something that makes the reader preparing himself and equiping his mind to be ready for the next events.

It would be better for some words here to be replaced with some others

like:

the word answer: I think it's better than response that often includes an
action

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I've finished these lines only

First of all, let me give this story a very good mark

For its simple language that itten in

So that, no complex sentences , no complex words
and very simple Idea ,too.
Some thing I wished here

I hoped you made an enough description for any thing around
as an introduction for the story, something that makes the reader preparing himself and equiping his mind to be ready for the next events.

It would be better for some words here to be replaced with some others

like:

the word answer: I think it's better than response that often includes an
action

you are as good as I thought ..

let us discuss what you have observed ..


anyway, I hope you see again the texts

you have to know the differences between a simple sentence and a complex one ..

this is a complex sentence " After a long time, he found a clue which made the mysterious door possible to be solved

because of containing after and comma ..

a simple sentence like " he likes to eat alone "

please refer to this website to take a look ..

http://eslbee.com/sentences.htm

for the word " answer " it is a very common word so , i replaced by response ..

what you have advised me , i will take it as a good advice

i really appreciate your comments and like them as well ..
please be always here

waiting for the rest of your notes

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this is a complex sentence " After a long time, he found a clue which made the mysterious door possible to be solved

The "COMPLEXITY" here has two meanings::
The first through the structure of the sentence and this what you and Link are talking about
the other and what I ment here is the function or the simple meanig of the sentence
itself for those who exactly know the structure

Many thanks for the Link
I realy need it.

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The "COMPLEXITY" here has two meanings::
The first through the structure of the sentence and this what you and Link are talking about
the other and what I ment here is the function or the simple meanig of the sentence
itself for those who exactly know the structure

Many thanks for the Link
I realy need it.

I took it as simple as possible

any way , continue your observation about this story ..

Don't think i dislike what you have said "!

I really like your coming

my regards